Sorry guys that I'm posting this today! Ryan, hopefully you got my email - it explains why I didn't post till today.
Anyway, I changed up the hierarchy and addressed all of the comments in class, plus added a halftone of Takeshi Kitano - the teacher from battle royale.
Good improvements.
ReplyDeleteFeedback:
1. You may want to explore what happens if the face of Kitano is the entire page, and you lose the shoulders/torso. He looks a bit non-threatening, but if you blow him WAAAAY up, it might work even better.
2. The weapon in the hand on the right character doesn't read well, you may want to substitute it for something else.
3. I'd consider moving the Bengies info away from the title and slogan, perhaps down a bit further on the composition.
This is really coming along. Good work!
I like the idea of blowing up the teacher's face huge, his body language is slouchy and not intimidating. Also keep in mind that the eyes are the most intense when you see a face, so be mindful of where they're hitting in your layout.
ReplyDeleteThe type at the bottom doesn't need to have that much emphasis. Try scaling it down. It's a nice resolution so far.