I redrew this to suggest female legs a little better and moved the text out of her lower leg. I think the text might need to be smaller because the hierarchy seems to be competing. Yay/nay?
Hierarchy is definitely fighting right now, but there is some good improvement.
The legs work much better now. I wonder what would happen if you used the title Barbarella to suggest a ring around the planet?
I'd consider pulling the secondary type away from the leg, and letting it sit on its own. It's much too big right now as well.
Love the color palette, and the illustration. Consider where the body hits the margin...does it need the belly button to reinforce it's a person? The addition of the space bikini and redefining the boots works much, much better.
The bikini is a really nice touch, it definitely registers as a pair of legs now. I would change the festival text to run in a single line following the curve of her leg, it'll let us focus on the legs instead of secondary text.
Hierarchy is definitely fighting right now, but there is some good improvement.
ReplyDeleteThe legs work much better now. I wonder what would happen if you used the title Barbarella to suggest a ring around the planet?
I'd consider pulling the secondary type away from the leg, and letting it sit on its own. It's much too big right now as well.
Love the color palette, and the illustration. Consider where the body hits the margin...does it need the belly button to reinforce it's a person? The addition of the space bikini and redefining the boots works much, much better.
Good work so far.
The bikini is a really nice touch, it definitely registers as a pair of legs now. I would change the festival text to run in a single line following the curve of her leg, it'll let us focus on the legs instead of secondary text.
ReplyDeleteNice work!